Friday 2 November 2018

term 4 week 4

This term we are reading a book called the Tale of Despereaux Miss Tisdall gave us a sentence from the book to carry on writing from. This is the sentence:

The beating of the drum let them know  that an important decision. would have been made one that affected the safety and well being of the entire mouse community.

This is what I wrote:
Despereaux could hear the drums lingering in the distance. Boom, bing, bang. He loved the sound of the music. He wanted to go and investigate where the music was coming from. He started to  scurrying through the creepy hallway in a zig-zag way.

He arrived at the king's throne room only to find the king playing the drums. When he saw the king he fainted of pure fight, face first onto the floor.

Then the princess found him and took him to her room and tried to help him. It did not work. Princess then took him to the king and said to get help. He said no and to get rid of that thing but she said no.

1 comment:

  1. Hello Shilah
    This sounds like a very interesting book, would you recommend it? You have really listened well to Miss Tisdall reading the passage as what you wrote after certainly sounds like it could be part of the story! My favourite line from your writing is; he started scurrying through the creepy hallway...
    Just remember when you are publishing though you need to make sure that your writing is making sense and that you haven't missed any words out in sentences!
    Nga mihi
    Mrs England

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Thank-you for your positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.